cheeseman,
I really enjoyed the clear imagery you used telling your story.
This sounds to me like someone who might want to try writing a short story, or a poem in free verse.
Thanks for sharing!
-Mr. M

another poem by cheeseman
if the sky turned red, what would you do
would you run around like a cockatoo?
would you act normally, like it was blue?
or would you say, “i’m allergic to red AACHHOOO!”
if the sky turned red i would be scared and run,
(while some baby cries and sucks his thumb)
whise things can get bad, then often worse,
ill be glad if i don’t end up in a hearse
but the sky is not red so we wont die,
bu think again, what if we could fly?
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one day i was running across the grass prairie
then all of the sudden some things went scary
the sky turned orange, the grass on fire
then out of the blue the fire got higher
i was trapped in a corner, stuck right there
then the fire gained size and caught on my hair
it spread to my pants, i rolled in the dirt,
then suddenly it caught to my shirt
by then i was scared, freaked out, in denial
but then i saw it, the great river nile
i ran through the fire, at the speed of a lion
then my foot hit a rock and i was flyin
i lay on the ground, 3 feet away
i was praying out loud, saying i want to stay
i tried to get up, to escape and be free
but i couldnt even budge and the fire engulfed me
i was to die by the river,alone and in pain
but then came my angel, a child named shane
he dragged me to the river, i went cold all over
i realized this was because i killed a 4-leaf clover
then i was there in a hospital
and i was in a room telling my tale
i thout i would live, but i wasnt lucky
later that night came the sad end of me
some stories end happy, some storys end sad
at the end of this one no one is too glad
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cheese; a hycu by cheeseman
cheese is really good
cheese is my insparation
i like cheese a lot
Copyright © 2008 cheeseman
cheeseman,
I really enjoyed the clear imagery you used telling your story.
This sounds to me like someone who might want to try writing a short story, or a poem in free verse.
Thanks for sharing!
-Mr. M
By: mrmadden on 14 October 2008
at 7:48 pm
Very creative…it made me smile…..by reading this, I can guess your personality. (Don’t worry it isn’t bad) If that makes any sense at all…
By: laniedj on 12 November 2008
at 7:26 pm